Poetic writing

Inspired by Philippa Werry's poem, Palm Tree. Room 12 wrote their own metaphor-ladden poetry.

SJ P4 N1 2009

Palm Tree

Cluster of exclamation marks - 

astonishment on a stick.

One-legged signpost

pointing everywhere.

Satellite dish

slanted to the sun.

A handful of combs

grooming the clouds.

A kennelful of shaggy dogs

straining on a lead.

A startled starfish

marooned high above the sea.

Hula skirts dancing

all by themselves.

Eighteen arms in droopy sleeves

waving gently in the breeze.

All these things until

the clouds darken,

the wind gets stronger,

the storm gets nearer.

The tree bends low - 

tosses, turns

into a cannon 

firing out lethal 

coconut

cannonballs.

Philippa Werry

Our task:

1. Choose an object.
2. Create five metaphors to describe it.
3. Arrange our metaphors into a poem.

Miss Salt: Cars

Electric pulses racing along blackened wires.

Hungry insects guzzling sap.

Angry bears growling and prowling.

Shiny jewels scattered far and wide.

Metal cheetahs sprinting lonely races.

Joshua H: Bouncy Balls

A bird gliding near the ground.

Sunset rising.

Cheetahs sprinting across the plains.

Armadillos rolling.

Orange kangaroos bouncing.

Eden: Trees

Fingers pointing in different directions.

Cats moulting in summer.

Birds flapping their wings all day long.

Statues scattered, silent and still.

Earthquake building crashed to the ground.

Reuben: Stock cars

A tiger roars when it gets angry.

Mud pools splashing bubbles of mud.

Metal elephants stampeding around the track.

Washing machine tyres spinning around.

Book pages flying.

Colby: Dragons

Hard scaly skin covering the sun.

Fires quick blazing out of a volcano.

Shark's teeth pointing everywhere.

A seagull gliding in the air.

Two legs traveling in the midnight light.

Gemma: A tree

A fledgling trying to fly.

Cat's scratching pole.

Scabbed all over.

A dribbly orthodontic patient.

A paper factory.

Briana: Gorgon

Strom-torn branch planted in the ground.

Misshappen pole topped by a storm.

Waterfall adorned by weeds.

Totem pole covered with grass.

Rotten tree, burning branches first.

Katelyn: Cats

Super fast cars racing to the finish line.
Snakes hissing at their predators.
Turtles walking so slow.
Hair molting when you brush it.
Different colours everywhere, it's a Rainbow fish.